[Quick Summary: Unintended consequences results when a young woman persuades a milk toast friend to marry her.]
Between you, me, and the lamp post, I didn't like the last script.
Nor this one either.
I used to rush on to the next good script.
But over time, I've made it a rule to take the time to analyze:
1) Why the script didn't work for me
2) One good take-away for my writing tool box
Why this script didn't work for me:
- It's very talky, without enough movement.
- Trudy always takes advantage of Norval, even to the point of a fake marriage.
- I didn't want this couple to be together. Where's the rooting interest?
One good writing tool: Reveal coverups in the last 25% of the scene.
- ex. Norval pretends to be Trudy's army fiancee before the justice of the peace (coverup). They are married (75%), then Norval signs the wrong name (25%).
- The script takes its time to stretch the coverup. The reveal isn't too soon.
WHAT I'VE LEARNED: When I don't like a script, I still need to push myself to figure out what does and does not work.
The Miracle of Morgan's Creek (1944)
by Preston Sturges