[Quick Summary: A comedy filmmaker unsuccessfully tries to break new ground.]
1 - I want script readers to "get" my scripts, i.e., they see what I'm seeing in my head.
So when I read a script that I don't get (like this one), I tend to take a closer look.
This story begins with a popular comedy filmmaker who now wants to make a serious drama. However, the public just wants more of his early stuff.
The filmmaker experiences/complains about the pressures of sycophants, women, family, etc....and then nothing happens.
So WHAT IS THE POINT? I couldn't see what the writer was aiming for.
2 - Here's one scene that was clear, and juggled pathos and comedy as well:
WALKING MAN (Overlapping Sandy's speech): Are you Sandy Bates?
SANDY (To the man, trying to get rid of him) Uh, no. (To Isobel) The kids will probably be starved.
WALKING MAN: Yes, you are.
SANDY (Shaking his head, trying to get rid of the man): Uh, no, no, no, no, no, no. I'm not.
WALKING MAN: My mother buys meat in the same butcher shop your mother does.
SANDY (Laughing): Oh, great.
WALKING MAN (Handing Sandy a piece of paper): Can I have your autograph?
SANDY (Reacting): Oh, Jesus.
WALKING MAN: Could you just write "To Phyllis Weinstein, you unfaithful, lying bitch"?
WHAT I'VE LEARNED: One tip is whatever characters do, they must experience consequences.
If nothing happens, I'm 99% uninterested.
Stardust Memories (1980)
by Woody Allen
Four Films of Woody Allen (book published 1982)