[Quick Summary: After his boss of a used car lot dies unexpectedly, Rudy stumbles along trying to keep the lot out of the hands of the boss' evil brother.]
The plot was ok,
This script was good.
This intro to Rudy was the best part,
Since the actions explain where his character stood.
ex. "EXT. AN EDSEL - DAWN
...Lucky Used Cars is on a 4-lane highway on the outskirts of a southwestern city. Behind it, an alley, some warehouses, and high-tension lines. And the desert.
We CRANE DOWN TO
A 1974 BUICK ELECTRA 225
Its repainted body can't hide the dents and nicks. The driver's door is open.
We PUSH IN through the rear window, past the steering wheel, all the way into the dashboard, the speedometer, the ODOMETER: 98,577. Then, suddenly...CLICK! It changes to 38,577!
A MAN pops up from under the dash and bangs his head on the steering wheel!
RUDY: Ow! Fuck!
This is RUDY RUSSO, 32. Rudy is handsome, smooth, a charmer, and a mover. And a liar. His sartorial taste is a little loud. Rudy sprays some "R & L Essence of Vinyl" across the front seat, and sniffs it.
RUDY: Ahhh!"
WHAT I'VE LEARNED: When introducing your character through his/her actions, make it count. Make it stand out. Don't start with boring or ambiguous.
Used Cars (1980)(2nd draft, 9/18/79)
by Robert Zemeckis & Bob Gale
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