Today I read a spec comedy script that has gotten several requests.
The catchy logline made me curious: It's a "What Women Want" with a frat boy twist.
Would the script live up to the promise?
I scratched my head.
The good news: The writer can write. He has a consistent voice & tone, and made sure the characters do arc. There's a strong antagonist that puts the antagonist in real jeopardy.
The bad news: I wondered who would want to see this movie.
This is a comedy (It is a comedy, right? Or is it a rom-com? No, comedy. I think it's a comedy. But it could be a rom-com b/c there are sacrifices for love.)
It's aimed at ...well...it's a nightmare.
Maybe guys because of the half that is the frat boy part? Maybe women b/c the other half is a rom-com?
The problem is that the script tries to mesh the wrong ends of two genres, which left me dissatisfied.
I can see guys will complain there's not enough guy jokes. Then women will complain the romance is sacrificed for guy jokes.
This script is good as a sample, because it shows the writer can set up a very broad comedy.
However, I'd want to see more scripts from the writer.
WHAT I'VE LEARNED: Even if you write a good script that attracts attention, it might not get past the slush pile.
Your script must be technically great, deliver emotion, AND ALSO meet the audience's expectations for the genre.
[This is what is often known as a "marketable" script.]