[Quick Summary: After corporate employee designs a "process", he's conned into leaking it to a competitor...or so we think.]
Random thoughts about this script:
1. It is not about Spain nor is it a war movie.
2. Like another Mamet script, it's all about the con game.
3. I was all prepared to catch the surprise twist, honestly, I did...but Mamet conned me too.
More random thoughts:
1. This was good, but it wasn't my favorite Mamet script.
2. The reason the con is such a great framework is because the protagonist is a pro-active participant.
3. How do you not telegraph the twist? Everyone but the protagonist stays super-normal, so our eyes are drawn to him, not the wily antagonist.
WHAT I'VE LEARNED: Mamet is unusually adept at fooling my expectations.
Like three card monty, I always pick the wrong card.
The Spanish Prisoner (1997)
by David Mamet
Wednesday, June 6, 2012
Monday, May 28, 2012
TODAY'S NUGGET: Altered States (1980) - When Emotional Change Takes a Back Seat
[Quick Summary: A Harvard physician experiments with an isolation tank and a little known drug that regresses him into a primitive state.]
If The Hospital was a crazy script in a good way, Altered States was crazy in a bad way for me.
Dr. Jessup has a deep need to ferret out the science behind altered states of consciousness. [Fair enough.]
He seeks out a Mexican drug that regresses him into an ape, and even into goo. [Ok, I can buy that.]
I could stomach the extreme, far out psychological visions.
I managed the bizarre physical transformations
However, no amount of flash, sparkle, SFX, & violence in the script could make up for the fact that Jessup has little emotional change until the end.
I soon got tired of the spectacle because I felt very far from Jessup.
He does not regret eliminating everything in his life - wife, daughters, friendships.
He is so focused on his experiments that there is less and less story.
As the experiments got wilder and weirder, I cared less and less. Yikes.
WHAT I'VE LEARNED: The difference between The Hospital (great) vs. Altered States (so-so) was emotional change vs. less emotional change.
Altered States (1980)
by Paddy Chayefsky
If The Hospital was a crazy script in a good way, Altered States was crazy in a bad way for me.
Dr. Jessup has a deep need to ferret out the science behind altered states of consciousness. [Fair enough.]
He seeks out a Mexican drug that regresses him into an ape, and even into goo. [Ok, I can buy that.]
I could stomach the extreme, far out psychological visions.
I managed the bizarre physical transformations
However, no amount of flash, sparkle, SFX, & violence in the script could make up for the fact that Jessup has little emotional change until the end.
I soon got tired of the spectacle because I felt very far from Jessup.
He does not regret eliminating everything in his life - wife, daughters, friendships.
He is so focused on his experiments that there is less and less story.
As the experiments got wilder and weirder, I cared less and less. Yikes.
WHAT I'VE LEARNED: The difference between The Hospital (great) vs. Altered States (so-so) was emotional change vs. less emotional change.
Altered States (1980)
by Paddy Chayefsky
Wednesday, May 23, 2012
TODAY'S NUGGET: The Hospital (1971) - Order Only in Hindsight
[Quick Summary: One night at the hospital, a chief of staff on his last straw faces several crises, including intertwining staff deaths, and an odd young woman.]
This is a crazy-assed script.
I honestly had no idea where the story was going.
First, I worried about Dr. Herbert Bock, the crotchety doctor with every reason to be suicidal.
Then I got upset when the deaths of various hospital staffers interrupted Dr. Bock's story.
(It was like commercials interrupting your favorite soap opera.)
I didn't care as much that the hospital had run amok.
I just wanted to know if Dr. Bock was going to make it.
Here's kicker #1: I didn't even like Dr. Bock. But I still worried.
Here's kicker #2: The various staff deaths are important in the end to Dr. Bock's final decision.
Chayefsky did it again:
1) He made me care about a character I did not like.
2) He brought order out of what looked like chaos on the page.
3) It was a surprising journey.
WHAT I'VE LEARNED: This is a technically difficult script.
To keep the chaos going while leaving clues and also not lose the audience? Very thin line.
The Hospital (1971)
by Paddy Chayefsky
This is a crazy-assed script.
I honestly had no idea where the story was going.
First, I worried about Dr. Herbert Bock, the crotchety doctor with every reason to be suicidal.
Then I got upset when the deaths of various hospital staffers interrupted Dr. Bock's story.
(It was like commercials interrupting your favorite soap opera.)
I didn't care as much that the hospital had run amok.
I just wanted to know if Dr. Bock was going to make it.
Here's kicker #1: I didn't even like Dr. Bock. But I still worried.
Here's kicker #2: The various staff deaths are important in the end to Dr. Bock's final decision.
Chayefsky did it again:
1) He made me care about a character I did not like.
2) He brought order out of what looked like chaos on the page.
3) It was a surprising journey.
WHAT I'VE LEARNED: This is a technically difficult script.
To keep the chaos going while leaving clues and also not lose the audience? Very thin line.
The Hospital (1971)
by Paddy Chayefsky
Wednesday, May 16, 2012
TODAY'S NUGGET: House of Games (1987)
[Quick Summary: Margaret Ford, a female psychiatrist, falls for a Mike's con, and becomes entrapped in his elaborate crime web.]
Mike tells Margaret that the "confidence game" works because the mark doesn't give the confidence.
The con man gives his confidence to the mark, usually by bringing the mark in on the scheme.
Mike does it again and again to Margaret.
ex. At their first meeting, he asks her to help him, and she loses her bank account.
ex. Mark develops Margaret's trust by showing her how the game works on a young man at the Western Union office.
ex. His cronies show her how the Tap con works.
The script ups the ante with each demonstration. Margaret feels "in", accepted, and somewhat invulnerable.
The last thing on her mind is that these nice guys were setting her up...and BOOM! That's when it happens.
WHAT I'VE LEARNED: The stakes rise beautifully as Mike confides more and more in Margaret.
Also, the false sense of security is a great setup for a great third act payoff
House of Games (1989)
Written & directed by David Mamet
Mike tells Margaret that the "confidence game" works because the mark doesn't give the confidence.
The con man gives his confidence to the mark, usually by bringing the mark in on the scheme.
Mike does it again and again to Margaret.
ex. At their first meeting, he asks her to help him, and she loses her bank account.
ex. Mark develops Margaret's trust by showing her how the game works on a young man at the Western Union office.
ex. His cronies show her how the Tap con works.
The script ups the ante with each demonstration. Margaret feels "in", accepted, and somewhat invulnerable.
The last thing on her mind is that these nice guys were setting her up...and BOOM! That's when it happens.
WHAT I'VE LEARNED: The stakes rise beautifully as Mike confides more and more in Margaret.
Also, the false sense of security is a great setup for a great third act payoff
House of Games (1989)
Written & directed by David Mamet
Thursday, May 10, 2012
TODAY'S NUGGET: Things Change (1988) -
[Quick Summary: After an old Chicago Italian-American shoeshine man agrees to take the rap for a mob guy, he is assigned a keeper, who takes them on one last adventure in Lake Tahoe.]
Holy crap, this is unbelievably good writing.
Roger Ebert states it best: This film "confirms Mamet's gift for leading us through truly bewildering plots."
The plot seems simple.
In two days, the old shoeshine man Gino (Don Amache) will admit to a murder he didn't commit. In exchange, the mob boss will give him a boat when Gino gets out of jail.
Jerry (Joe Mantegna), a lower mob guy, babysits Gino for these two days.
Jerry feels sorry for the old man and decides to take Gino to Lake Tahoe for one last hurrah.
Now the plot really shines when impossible things happen. Gino's innocent curiosity and unbelievable timing keeps Jerry hopping.
Why do we believe it at all? Because it all stems from Gino's character.
ex. Jerry takes Gino to the roulette table. Jerry has rigged it with the house that Gino will continue to win, but not take any of the winnings.
Soon Gino turns a few bucks into $35k, and followers flock to the table.
Jerry pulls them away and makes up a reason that the money has to be given back.
Gino agrees, and we think that's the end of the situation.
But it's not.
When Jerry is busy, Gino wanders away to a Wheel of Fortune. He bets the entire $35k on a turn to see if his streak would continue.
That's what was great about the script.
We believe this unbelievable moment because this is something curious Gino would do.
WHAT I'VE LEARNED: If the character believes it, I'll believe it too.
Things Change (1988)
by David Mamet & Shel Silverstein
Holy crap, this is unbelievably good writing.
Roger Ebert states it best: This film "confirms Mamet's gift for leading us through truly bewildering plots."
The plot seems simple.
In two days, the old shoeshine man Gino (Don Amache) will admit to a murder he didn't commit. In exchange, the mob boss will give him a boat when Gino gets out of jail.
Jerry (Joe Mantegna), a lower mob guy, babysits Gino for these two days.
Jerry feels sorry for the old man and decides to take Gino to Lake Tahoe for one last hurrah.
Now the plot really shines when impossible things happen. Gino's innocent curiosity and unbelievable timing keeps Jerry hopping.
Why do we believe it at all? Because it all stems from Gino's character.
ex. Jerry takes Gino to the roulette table. Jerry has rigged it with the house that Gino will continue to win, but not take any of the winnings.
Soon Gino turns a few bucks into $35k, and followers flock to the table.
Jerry pulls them away and makes up a reason that the money has to be given back.
Gino agrees, and we think that's the end of the situation.
But it's not.
When Jerry is busy, Gino wanders away to a Wheel of Fortune. He bets the entire $35k on a turn to see if his streak would continue.
That's what was great about the script.
We believe this unbelievable moment because this is something curious Gino would do.
WHAT I'VE LEARNED: If the character believes it, I'll believe it too.
Things Change (1988)
by David Mamet & Shel Silverstein
Thursday, May 3, 2012
TODAY'S NUGGET: The Americanization of Emily (1964) - Blow & Pop of Satire
[Quick Summary: A cowardly American Naval officer & "dog robber" falls for a patriotic, female British chauffeur but their opposing views on the war is problematic.]
Paddy Chayefsky came up with the idea of writing this as a black satirical comedy on a plane to NYC.
What is satire? Glad you asked.
Satire (n.): A literary work holding up human vices and follies to ridicule or scorn.
Easy enough, but how do you actually write satire?
Chayefsky did it by juxtaposing ridiculousness with reality.
Let's see how he ridicules the hype of war:
ex. EMILY'S HOME, LIVING ROOM
MRS. BARHAM: Emily, well, I must warn you. Charlie's picture is in all the papers, and they're going to build a monument on his grave.
[Reality: Charlie, the coward, is being celebrated as a hero.]
EMILY (studying the Globe): What on earth for? All he did was die. Dear me, we shall be celebrating cancer and automobile smash-ups next.
[Ridiculousness: This is stupid.]
CUMMINGS: He didn't just die, Emily! He sacrificed his life!
[Reality: Charlie is the war's next poster boy.]
MRS. BARHAM: Well, that was very pagan of him.
[Ridiculousness: Who does that help? Warmongers?]
CUMMINGS: He was the first American to die on Omaha Beach.
[Reality: This is a PR dream!]
EMILY: Was there a contest?
[Ridiculousness: What kind of contest are you running?]
WHAT I'VE LEARNED: One recipe for satire is to blow up a balloon with human vices, then pop it with ridicule.
The Americanization of Emily (1964)
by Paddy Chayefsky
Adapted from the novel by William Bradford Huie
Paddy Chayefsky came up with the idea of writing this as a black satirical comedy on a plane to NYC.
What is satire? Glad you asked.
Satire (n.): A literary work holding up human vices and follies to ridicule or scorn.
Chayefsky did it by juxtaposing ridiculousness with reality.
Let's see how he ridicules the hype of war:
ex. EMILY'S HOME, LIVING ROOM
MRS. BARHAM: Emily, well, I must warn you. Charlie's picture is in all the papers, and they're going to build a monument on his grave.
[Reality: Charlie, the coward, is being celebrated as a hero.]
EMILY (studying the Globe): What on earth for? All he did was die. Dear me, we shall be celebrating cancer and automobile smash-ups next.
[Ridiculousness: This is stupid.]
CUMMINGS: He didn't just die, Emily! He sacrificed his life!
[Reality: Charlie is the war's next poster boy.]
MRS. BARHAM: Well, that was very pagan of him.
[Ridiculousness: Who does that help? Warmongers?]
CUMMINGS: He was the first American to die on Omaha Beach.
[Reality: This is a PR dream!]
EMILY: Was there a contest?
[Ridiculousness: What kind of contest are you running?]
WHAT I'VE LEARNED: One recipe for satire is to blow up a balloon with human vices, then pop it with ridicule.
The Americanization of Emily (1964)
by Paddy Chayefsky
Adapted from the novel by William Bradford Huie
Monday, April 30, 2012
TODAY'S NUGGET: Bugsy (1991) - Three is Not a Crowd
[Quick Summary: Benjamin "Bugsy" Siegel tries to build the first big casino in Las Vegas, but as costs skyrocket, his mafia financiers put the screws on him.]
I was intrigued how Toback applied "Warren Beatty's Third Intelligence Theory"* over & over to scenes.
The tension grows because there are three people instead of two.
ex. Harry Greenberg, one of Bugsy's oldest friends, has ratted on the "family" and asks Bugsy what to do.
Bugsy takes Harry for a drive, and Virginia insists on going too. [The triangle in this scene is Bugsy, Virginia, & Harry.]
In the car, Harry brings up Virginia's ex-boyfriend and Bugsy's divorce. [Ignorant Harry makes things worse.]
At the train trestle road, Bugsy and Harry walk up a path.Virginia gets impatient and yells to Bugsy. [Virginia ups the tension now.]
Shots. Bugsy returns without Harry. Virginia is distraught. [The tension now is HIGHER than before.]
WHAT I'VE LEARNED: A 3rd person can really push the main story forward.
Bugsy (1991)
by James Toback
* Toback writes about "Beatty's Third Intelligence Theory of Moviemaking" in the introduction to the script:
"Essentially, the idea is that three people deciding the course of a movie are better than two, since when there are two, one always emerges as the stronger and the film is left without a sufficiently tense dialectic, whereas when there are three, every idea needs to pass rigorous scrutiny."
Toback was talking about himself, Beatty and director Barry Levinson, but it can also apply to screenwriting.
** This is a very smooth read after
- 20 drafts (over 6 yrs.)
- 7 rewrites (in 4 months of pre-production), &
- daily re-writing of lines, moments and scenes daily (over 3 months of shooting)
I was intrigued how Toback applied "Warren Beatty's Third Intelligence Theory"* over & over to scenes.
The tension grows because there are three people instead of two.
ex. Harry Greenberg, one of Bugsy's oldest friends, has ratted on the "family" and asks Bugsy what to do.
Bugsy takes Harry for a drive, and Virginia insists on going too. [The triangle in this scene is Bugsy, Virginia, & Harry.]
In the car, Harry brings up Virginia's ex-boyfriend and Bugsy's divorce. [Ignorant Harry makes things worse.]
At the train trestle road, Bugsy and Harry walk up a path.Virginia gets impatient and yells to Bugsy. [Virginia ups the tension now.]
Shots. Bugsy returns without Harry. Virginia is distraught. [The tension now is HIGHER than before.]
WHAT I'VE LEARNED: A 3rd person can really push the main story forward.
Bugsy (1991)
by James Toback
* Toback writes about "Beatty's Third Intelligence Theory of Moviemaking" in the introduction to the script:
"Essentially, the idea is that three people deciding the course of a movie are better than two, since when there are two, one always emerges as the stronger and the film is left without a sufficiently tense dialectic, whereas when there are three, every idea needs to pass rigorous scrutiny."
Toback was talking about himself, Beatty and director Barry Levinson, but it can also apply to screenwriting.
** This is a very smooth read after
- 20 drafts (over 6 yrs.)
- 7 rewrites (in 4 months of pre-production), &
- daily re-writing of lines, moments and scenes daily (over 3 months of shooting)
Thursday, April 26, 2012
TODAY'S NUGGET: The Goddess (1958) - Take the Punch
[Quick Summary: To ward off loneliness, a young unloved girl grasps at a career as an up-and-coming Hollywood starlet, but it's never enough.]
Emily Ann Faulkner, who transforms herself into Rita Shawn,just can't understand why no one loves her enough.
I mean, after all, she's made all the "right" decisions for her career:
- Like leaving her child with her ex-husband
- And getting married to a 2nd guy who tells her he'd be a terrible husband
- And sleeping with producers as bribes for parts
But this isn't a story about career vs. personal life.
It's about a woman who angles, schemes, begs, guilts, and STILL can't fathom what is wrong with other people...when the real problem is her.
Chayefsky allows his characters to make decisions, then suffer the consequences each time. It's real life.
There's no pulling the punch, which I see too much in spec scripts.
WHAT I'VE LEARNED: It's nice to see characters take the punch.
If they learn from it, they will have earned their victory at the end.
If they don't, then they don't deserve it anyway.
The Goddess (1958)
by Paddy Chayefsky
Emily Ann Faulkner, who transforms herself into Rita Shawn,just can't understand why no one loves her enough.
I mean, after all, she's made all the "right" decisions for her career:
- Like leaving her child with her ex-husband
- And getting married to a 2nd guy who tells her he'd be a terrible husband
- And sleeping with producers as bribes for parts
But this isn't a story about career vs. personal life.
It's about a woman who angles, schemes, begs, guilts, and STILL can't fathom what is wrong with other people...when the real problem is her.
Chayefsky allows his characters to make decisions, then suffer the consequences each time. It's real life.
There's no pulling the punch, which I see too much in spec scripts.
WHAT I'VE LEARNED: It's nice to see characters take the punch.
If they learn from it, they will have earned their victory at the end.
If they don't, then they don't deserve it anyway.
The Goddess (1958)
by Paddy Chayefsky
Friday, April 20, 2012
TODAY'S NUGGET: Marty (1955) - Hey, That's Me!
[Quick Summary: Marty the butcher can't get a date to save his life, until one night...]
Paddy Chayefsky was an award winning playwright, tv and film writer for a reason.
He sure knew how to introduce a character with actions instead of words.
The script opens and a female customer peppers Marty the butcher with questions about his brother's recent wedding. Then she basically needles him with "Why aren't YOU married, Marty?"
Marty is polite, but exasperated.
Why? Because the next female customer is exactly the same: "I heard about your brother's wedding. So why aren't YOU married, Marty?"
We get the idea that this happens ALL day long and instantly, we know all about Marty...and he's said very little.
WHAT I'VE LEARNED: Chayefsky writes beautifully flawed but identifiable characters.
Who's Marty? Marty is me. That awkward situation? I've been there too.
Now that's a great introduction!
Marty (1955)
by Paddy Chayefsky
Paddy Chayefsky was an award winning playwright, tv and film writer for a reason.
He sure knew how to introduce a character with actions instead of words.
The script opens and a female customer peppers Marty the butcher with questions about his brother's recent wedding. Then she basically needles him with "Why aren't YOU married, Marty?"
Marty is polite, but exasperated.
Why? Because the next female customer is exactly the same: "I heard about your brother's wedding. So why aren't YOU married, Marty?"
We get the idea that this happens ALL day long and instantly, we know all about Marty...and he's said very little.
WHAT I'VE LEARNED: Chayefsky writes beautifully flawed but identifiable characters.
Who's Marty? Marty is me. That awkward situation? I've been there too.
Now that's a great introduction!
Marty (1955)
by Paddy Chayefsky
Thursday, April 19, 2012
TODAY'S NUGGET: Goal Acomplished!
I finished the 101 WGA Scripts of All Time!
I managed to read all but two (#57 Crimes & Misdemeanors, & #37 The Philadelphia Story).
Some I simply could not finish (ex. #23 Gone With the Wind).
A few I did not completely understand (ex.#87 8 1/2).
But overall, this was the best thing I've ever done for myself as a writer.
Thank you, writers, for allowing me to stuff my tool box with little things that I noticed in your scripts that made them great.
I think I will keep up this one script per week as long as I can.
Any suggestions?
I managed to read all but two (#57 Crimes & Misdemeanors, & #37 The Philadelphia Story).
Some I simply could not finish (ex. #23 Gone With the Wind).
A few I did not completely understand (ex.#87 8 1/2).
But overall, this was the best thing I've ever done for myself as a writer.
Thank you, writers, for allowing me to stuff my tool box with little things that I noticed in your scripts that made them great.
I think I will keep up this one script per week as long as I can.
Any suggestions?
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