[Quick Summary: Superstar Jackson Maine meets Ally, a promising singer.]
TWO THINGS THAT THIS SCRIPT DOES WELL:
1) It reads fast. I was not excited to read a 137 pg. script.
However, it is reads fast and the scenes are clear.
2) One intent per scene. I also think it reads quickly because it does not try to do too much, i.e., it sticks to one intent per scene, rather several.
In the scene below: Note that it seems long on the page at first glance.
However, it will read fast because it is all one thought.
ex. "INT. BILTMORE HOTEL - BATHROOM - WIDE SHOT - DAY
PAN ALONG the bottom of a number of stalls. The bathroom seemingly empty... Until we hear a HUSHED VOICE and see two feet in heels in a stall down at the end.
ALLY (O.S.)(into phone): Roger...You're a wonderful man, yes, and you're a great lawyer. We're ust not meant to be together.
ANOTHER ANGLE - INSIDE THE STALL
ALLY CAMPANA, (early 30s) is on her cell phone.
ALLY (into phone): No, I don't wanna marry you -- are you crazy?!? The hell's the matter with you? Roger, we're done. Oh, God.
She hangs up, opens the door to the stall, and screams bloody murder.
ALLY: Fucking men!
She pulls herself together."
WHAT I'VE LEARNED: Keep the intent of a scene crisp and clear. Don't overload a scene with too many ideas. A short script with half-baked ideas is just as bad.
A Star is Born (2018)(final, 10/5/18)
by Eric Roth and Bradley Cooper & Will Fetters
Based on the 1954 screenplay by Moss Hart and the 1976 screenplay by John Gregory Dunne & Joan Didion and Frank Pierson
Based on a story by William Wellman and Robert Carson
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